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Performance Evaluation: I like Kerry. I feel like she's partly inspired by me being so goddamn fabulous. I don't think you can say "a spade a spade" anymore. Not very PC. Mind you, these guys aren't! I am enjoying this angle so far, though. A little bit of comedy is just enough for this one.

Royal Ball: I hate expressions like "the cameras open up" (etc) and "the scene fades to...", it's a pet peeve of mine. I think we're all more imaginative than that. I do like Bianca though. She's absolutely ridiculous. I think in terms of the actual writing the 'voice' could be worked on. It reads a little bit monotone to me (anyone else feel that? Might just be me!) - tense slips into past tense at one stage. Also, dialogue from two speakers appears on the same line. This is grammatically incorrect. Always a line break for a new speaker. I did nonetheless enjoy the content of the segment. helps continue to put Bianca over as a bit of a dick. But it's time to step it up a notch now I think.

Drama at the Fit Factory(1): I get the distinct feeling this feud is going to escalate on this show.

Washing Machine: Excellent. Could read this on a loop going round and round and round...

MASK OFF: I said in the Discord chat that this was a segment to look out for. A great developmental piece for a character that I wasn't honestly very keen on initially. Good imagery/descriptive language, and using The Informer is a good move, too. It's a character I'm familiar with from elsewhere so know he's not always a reliable journo! Loved seeing X run through other characters on the roster away from his own feud. Builds some depth. Well done.

Fuck no to weekly, please and thank you.

Flashback segments are fine, but like Shae said, you can resolve that problem REAL quick with a quick blurb on top of the segment (ex, earlier today, one week ago, etc). There's no reason they need to be frontloaded, but I do think it should be made clear that what we are looking at is a flashback. There have been a few occasions I have seen that not done here and I have been lost with what is being referenced.

Guilty as charged referencing other feds. While I do think it's not a bad thing maybe at the start of a character's introduction (mainly to establish if they are a veteran), I would advise against it being a weekly thing cause now the story is "here is what I'm doing in GLOBAL." Use it to establish that the character has been successful in other circles, and now he's here cause XYZ. I used it to establish Aleczander early in because he's a 15-year vet in the sport, but has almost been exclusively a tag team guy and now that he's here in GLOBAL, he's looking out for Aleczander only.

I am all for banning other feds if it gets Keegan and Hopper to stop mentioning CWF.

(I don't really care about fed mentions.)

I don’t even know what CWF but [spoiler]it made it into my match on show 4 twice [/spoiler]

E Z COIN: This guy is a complete douche. Hey, Siri: How do I buy crypto?

Drama at the Fit Factory (2): More tag drama, and these guys are definitely dominating the tag division storylines right now. Other teams need to pick it up in terms of storyline.

CAN'T KEEP AN OLD DOG DOWN: It's Christmas Day! (see, it's easy to keep track. Not really Inception, is it?) Anyway, this was okay. A bit tame, and doesn't appear to lead anywhere, though. Would the angle be better/worse if this segment didn't exist? I'm not convinced.

LET'S BE REAL: I didn't know who was talking at first. It would be good form to either introduce who is in the segment initially or drop a "said Ross" at the end of the first line of a speakers dialogue. Aside from that the segment is good and puts doubt on the abilities of someone who ought to believe him themselves, so I'm interested to see how this moves forward.

SOCIAL INSIGHTS: Colons. Not sure what this segment does really. We already know Angel's character type, and it doesn't really move any angle along?

HALL OF FAME STRENGTH: It took a few lines to realise this was happening ringside, then I had to go back and re-read it and ah yes of course it is. The term GLOBAL Nation still gives me the ick, and I love that. I enjoyed this, mate, and look forward, mate, to the meeting on D4... mate.

YORKSHIRE PUDDING SLIPPERS: Fun fact, this was inspired entirely by Keegan's real-life slippers.

PUBLIC HUMILIATION IS NIGH: Nice intro to the match, but I think it took up a segment slot unnecessarily as it could have just been part of the match slot. Personal opinion there, though.

Keegan told me this was the longest show yet if I remember correctly. Matches were all sold although I am partial to Amber Button vs. The Players. I had a lot of fun writing the seg with Keegan and I'm looking forward to more work with him. A few of the segments seemed to run a little longer than needed and made it somewhat harder to read the whole show. I saw a lot of improvement from the last show and if this is how things are going than I am super excited to really get going on this whole project!

I read the show, but with work ramping up thanks to so many water claims with the freeze we had at year's end.....I don't have time to do a detailed piece by piece feedback. So I will go for the short route this time.


BEST MATCH: I really liked Malta VS Dream because I believe this is a match that shoved Dream further into the "first champion" discussion. I also wanted to point this one out because I know it was something different from the writer. Good stuff. Close second for me was the Main Event.

BEST SEGMENT: I won't ever put something I write in here....so my vote goes to "I DID NOT HAVE RELATIONS WITH THE PRESIDENT"

BEST ANGLE: I'm really liking the way Reyn has been bursting into things, but I'm going to say that the continued EZ Rah VS Jerry David back and forth always makes me smile.

BEST LINE OF THE NIGHT: "Are you Actually Mentally ill?" - Rupert made me chuckle with this

ROOM FOR IMPROVEMENT: I don't care what conventional TV may do far as the way they do scenes.....we need to start writing stuff as if somebody has never read them before.....so put the name of the freaking characters in the segment so we know who is doing what. We can't get our minds in the right space knowing how to react if we don't know who it is. Mention their name in a description sentence or something.....I don't care. "Talk about a Price Change" was one that did this.....

Also SPace Oddity was difficult to get through. I had to read it multiple times to even try and make sense out of it. John J and Cruze are only two names I saw, but I wasn't even sure they were the wrestler parts of it....it was confusing.


Overall I felt this was a solid 7 to a 7.25 show....best show to date.

Several people hit it out of the park this week, like Alex Reyn and John J. Truth (who let's be honest, Pedro could write out the entire two hour long podcast each show, hit every conspiracy theory on the BINGO card and I would still read it) along with several others. Crusader X had a great promo. The British stable looked awesome, from the unsure segments in the middle of the show to the main event's conclusion. The content of everyone's segments is on point. Y'all know what you want to do and y'all are doing it. Don't be discouraged if people who are new to your style or your characters don't totally get what's going on. It takes time.

Daniel Dream continues to look like the star that he is. Bianca Davis is still punchable. Amber Lee looks like one of those underdog faces that could win a title out of nowhere. Darren Best and Sean Darring had the feel of an old NWA classic. Big Aug looks hella strong. The Great Wall looks like his match, if they ever run into each other. And now I see why I should have been worried about Alex Reyn. The matches are also on point, doing exactly what they're meant to and giving off the vibe they're supposed to.

Some stuff didn't hit as hard as others (I also wasn't a big fan of the awards ceremony spot at the end, it just flowed weird and maybe that should have been the show's opener instead?) but nothing was poorly written, and no stories seem like they're going nowhere. From week to week, everyone's keeping continuity in their own stories. I'm used to people just going off the rails at whatever whim they got that particular week. Sustainable episodic storytelling is happening here, and I love it.

I could also agree that some of the placements of segments and matches could be organized better, but you've heard that already. I don't need to repeat it.

At the end of the day, I just can't think of a single thing to say to anyone in particular or the fed as a whole that you are doing wrong or you need to improve on. Everyone here picked up on the premise pretty quickly, and everyone's flowing together towards it. If GLOBAL keeps doing shows like this in 2023, we aren't going to be able to hide in our corner of the hobby for long.

Sorry for my lack of feedback this week. Been dealing with a busted washer for the past three days, so lots of time spent with in-laws to wash all that, haha.

I'm also going to go the best overall feedback but stuff I skimmed on the original go-round of the show caught my eye.

BEST MATCH: I really felt like everyone took previous feedback to heart as overall this was IMO, the strongest show yet in terms of match quality. Now not every match needs to be an "epic" or a "banger" but it was really cool to see this week. Toss-up between Malta/Dream and Darring/Best for me. Both Darring and Dream feel like the biggest players thus far in GLOBAL from an in-ring standpoint aftet three shows. Amber/Lee/Alfie Button have been a fun pairing so far and I could see a title shot in their future.

BEST SEGMENT: I REALLY liked the Crusader X extended interview. That was fantastic piece of work and I feel like now the character will be on my radar going forward. I'm shocked e-wrestling doesn't do more of these types of things, but went a long way to not only differentiate The Informer from other interviewers, but also put over X's ambitions. Really nice work here. I also shouldn't have laughed as hard as I did at the Hedonistic New Year seg, but I did and I am a horrible person.

BEST ANGLE: There's a few that are grabbing my attention. The Master Sisters/Rich Family seems like they are continuing for a fun first Tag Title feud between families, David and E Z Rah had been different and fun in a good way from your typical feud, Darring and Dream aren't a full on feud, but I feel like something will transpire between the two based on nothing but my own thoughts and could be great. Prime Time Athletes/Health Fanatics is a fun little midcard tag feud as well. Alex Reyn destroying VIP was a genuine shock as he seemed to be a character pegged for big things, but I can dig what was done here.

BEST LINE OF THE NIGHT: I don't have one in particular.

ROOM FOR IMPROVEMENT: I can't harp on a whole lot. I think this was a great show top to bottom with a lot of great story advancement and as I said before, some great matches to boot. I'm with Hopper. Put some respect on your name with some names for your characters in segments, haha.

Belatedly, here’s my feedback for Domination 3. 4 will be going up very shortly. Well done, lads and lasses, you rose to the challenge, even if it took almost 45k to get there. It was what I wanted, so thank you once again.

Daniel Dream v Son of Malta: Even the first line is excellent and subsequently, which is what I more of GLOBAL, this has a big fight feel to it immediately, and it’s the opening match of a mid-arc episode. That’s not a disservice to either character, because both of them are a big fucking deal, but Brian has aided their cause by making it feel like I’m in the MGM Grand about to watch Fury and Wilder.
A nice, lively start, and how I would see Malta approaching this with Dream, and some early ‘heel heat’ from Dream by directing his anger towards the fans. Nice sprinkles of commentary, which I kind of expected, but most definitely in line with the style and treading the line beautifully between ‘both worlds.’ Well done from me, my man!

Many people have heard me bang on about timing and tempo. This match has that down to a T, and some lovely ‘spots’ to boot. The near falls escalate, but don’t take the piss by any stretch, and this is what many, can’t speak for everyone, crave from an opening match. And for most matches, you want both guys looking good, and they both come out it looking great. A stellar job.

Space Oddity: Right off the bag, I dig the reference. A very well-written piece and a cracking little story. I figure we may see of those mentioned here, though probably not. The door’s open. In the meantime, this was thoroughly enjoyable.

Performance Evaluation: Kerry Buckingham is a pain in the arse! However, she’s also fabulous and had me hooked immediately. The type of woman, irrespective of looks, I’d want to fuck or fuck up. Stella also has a sense of menace around her.
What I didn’t understand, I want to know more. This seriously intrigued me, I felt as if I were eavesdropping at a party, and everyone sounded great. Terrific job.

Royal Ball: And speaking of pains in the arse! A wonderful creation with so much potential, and a fine introductory piece. Great stuff.

Drama at The Fit Factory 1: I’m a fan of these guys. Every segment, they entertain me, and while I knew what was going to happen, Brian’s done a superb job in putting all of these segments together over the last two shows. Good way to kick things off, and I can see the PTA challenging for the straps in the very near future.

Aleczander v Steve Dann: THAT entrance! What a man he is. The interaction with the fans was wonderful. ATG talks shit, gets heat and sells, and there are so many things that can be done with him. Lovely escalation in terms of the falls, a Seth hallmark for sure, and a bloody good match that made Dann look very good indeed while giving the right man the win. Seth’s a master.

Washing Machine: I felt like I was back in the 50s.

Mask Off: A day or two before the show, Blair told me this was a LONG segment and that it may be reduced. I took one look at it, and said: “Leave it the way it is.” Was it long? Yes, it was, but I thought the intro was brilliant and this was a breakout piece, particularly off the back of the two previous shows. I don’t know if Blair was motivated by that, but either way, this was a remarkable response and a segment that really established the potential Crusader X has and made the character stand out. A dynamo of a segment, and on a show filled with them, a contender for the best one of the night. Again, a lengthy segment, but well worth every word and a massive well done from me. Oh, and a grand job with The Informer, too.

EZ Coin: A great advert for crypto currency, and shades of one ‘Money’ Mayweather here for me. A fine example of how you can say a lot without writing too much.

Drama at The Fit Factory 2: A classic case of the young v the old in many ways, and a good continuation of the opening segment in the series.

Angel v Bianca: GREAT entrance, right off the bat. And so was Bianca’s! I knew about that one going in. This feels like Hollywood, right?
As the match starts, I agree with giving Bianca the start of the match and capitalising on the heat that entrance would warrant. The commentary is on point as well. Also, ‘Atta Girl’ made me smile. I liked that.
And a great match to boot. I have a feeling the one on 4 is going to be even better, which is no mean feat. Very, very well-written with lots of ingredients that made this an entertaining read indeed.

Can’t Keep An Old Dog Down: Valorie Vitality has been at it in everything I’ve seen her so far. Courtney not only did a cracking job with VV, but JJ, too. My character (though not my creation) so plenty of praise and thanks from me for that. This is a good little feud that I came up with, but Courtney has done everything to make it more than that, and it’s been a brilliant first arc for Valorie. More of the same and in line with what I want from GLOBAL.

Let’s Be Real: While I liked this segment, and I definitely did, it made me feel sad because of Ross’s perception of himself and ‘honesty.’ For the record, I reckon he’s got a lot more left in the tank, but many (if not all) of us have been in this position, and it fucking sucks. This was a touching piece and felt like a break away from other segments on the show. Boy, did it live up to its segment title. It felt real. Fabulous work.

Social Insights: Someone digging into the GLOBAL universe, using Fawks and their own initiative in the process, and again, a segment akin to those I envisioned happening in GLOBAL before opening the place by someone who’s bought into the concept. I thought this was another strong segment.

August v Gemini: Just seeing these two people’s names brings a smile to my face. We know who’s going to win, but I expect it to be entertaining along the way.

Hey, we’ve seen some introductions tonight, and that was another BELTER! Man. Those names, and the way it finished…hats off. Seeing ‘The Boss of The Sauce’ makes me want to debut my character ‘The Sauce’ in its own right. Then again, seeing Angel’s entrance made me think of Pele Worthington, and these are characters no one knows. This is a good thing, by the way.
What a FUN match that was. I love some of August’s phrases and moves as well. That’s a big part of ‘ring psychology’ for yours truly, and Seth’s brilliant at it. So much potential for BOTH August and Aleczander. Am I surprised? No. The handler is a genius.

Hall of Fame Strength: Aleczander, I am amused, mate. Apologies on the ‘clash’ of strength competitions on 4, that’s my fault, and is clearly mentioned here. Apologies to Seth and Brian for that. This, though, was another segment that ramped tension up in a light-hearted-yet-serious-at-the-same-time motion. Enough with the hyphens.

Yorkshire Pudding Slippers: Thanks for the tribute, Scott. Yes, this is inspired by me sending WhatsApp messages and Scott hearing my slippers in the background. They are gone, but not forgotten. My WIFE was the reason I wore them!

At The Doom’s Gate: I hope the ‘both great names’ of Rupert and Nigel is a joke. They work for these characters, but no way I’d call my kids those names, let me tell you. Amazing logic by their father, by the way, and it reminds me of George Foreman on an unrelated note. An entertaining segment, all told, tying ‘Brothers and Sisters’ together.

Welcome to Corporate America: This reminds me of when I heard how much Cambridge Examiners get paid, just as I thought: This is not for me. A double take. Another solid piece of character development.

Alex Reyn v VIP: Some cracking commentary to sell Alex Reyn’s arrival. Tremendous. Who says you can’t do heel v heel, and VIP shows he’s still one, de facto face or not, with his immediate reaction. I’ve long looked forward to this match, and gave away its first offering in a different way to how I originally anticipated, but I hope the writer and the reader enjoyed it. Let’s crack on.

I got a bit carried away with reading it, and it plays to both characters’ strengths for me. Reyn is often referred to as ‘a horror film villain’ and he lives up to that particular billing here, aided by the commentary which brings plenty to proceedings.
VIP went out swinging, didn’t he? But, Reyn was too strong, swift and sick for him, and there’s no shame in that. A match full of action, not your typical match for obvious reasons, and with enough anticipation, it delivered on that and glad to see it was well received. Being honest, was it my intention to write VIP out on Domination 3? No, it wasn’t. But, I felt Reyn needed someone of some substance without taking out too major a player, and Price seemed to be a balancing act between both of those requirements. Brutal. Does that tell the story? Probably not.

Viral Comedy 4 – No wonder Lex Luger got heat speaking in the 3rd person, but I like it and it works for EZ Rah. Whoah, I wasn’t expecting any blood on the carpet, rolling around and having a straightener! To quote Burgundy, that escalated.

Drama at The Fit Factory 3 – My favourite of the three segments thus far, and that’s saying something. Well built throughout the show, and enhancing both teams. Mr. Bell sure knows what he’s doing.

BCNA Advert: Great to see a write-up for the league and good luck, Jeremy!

Payback: Going in, I had HUGE expectations because Chris himself told me it was the weirdest thing he’d ever written, Brian had praised it to the hill, and Chris’s match on 2 was ‘terrific for what it was,’ and not your run-of-the-mill squash it was passed over as in feedback, which personally pissed me off, and I’m not kidding.

Anyway, I couldn’t believe what I was reading halfway though, and Frankie Goes to Hollywood?! These two are absolutely, positively, off their fucking trolleys. I reckon this deserves another read, but yes, this certainly fits in with GLOBAL, Chris! A wonderful piece of work, which is very much welcome on what has been the best show by miles. The ending? Man, my man, Manny, was on fantastic form throughout and I’m as much a fan of his as I am Christian’s, possibly even more so. Now, I can see what Christ meant by that opening statement. Outrageous and outstanding.

Main Event: A decent match, and I left the finish up to the Pedros. I know that The Master Sisters knocked it out of the park on 4, and those comments will come shortly. I wanted to stay with this as the main event because I told the guys it would be 5 weeks out, and while I think it would have been better served somewhere else, I was fairly happy with it.

GLOBAL Awards: I put this last because it took the WHOLE 3 shows into consideration even if it was written well in advance. For example, Principe won best heel when it was going to be VIP, so that was an audible I had to call when I proposed Price being shelved. I thought it was good, and I’m fine with where it took place on the show.

Overall: Congratulations, you delivered on making this the best show, by far, out of the four.