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DOMINATION 21 FEEDBACK
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My feedback to come, and I sure need to catch up.
I love the amount of effort put into matches this show, though we still need more help in that department.
I love the amount of effort put into matches this show, though we still need more help in that department.
Re: DOMINATION 21 FEEDBACK
ONE PERCENT: X must address several fronts, and succeeds in doing so, in a simple, no-frills segment.
RED CARPET ENTRANCE: Are these guys tourists? Why are they looking for The Globe specifically? Wait and see, I guess...
HANDSOME AND BEAUTIFUL: Amber Lee returns! Welcome back.
SIMP-LING RIVALRY: ...was that Joe Public asserting himself? :O Also, Dann takes himself way too seriously. Also also, the return of Drill Instructor Miranda, directing her anger inwards instead of outwards as she has been doing in recent times. Welcome back. I missed writing you.
STREET FIGHT: Have you ever been hyped to write a match, and at the same time, it feels like a slog? That was me with this one. I had a bad head cold and the consequent brain-fog made this one take a lot longer than it should have. I hope the end result was worth it, with one moment in particular hitting the way I meant it to.
A COMPROMISE: Angel pivots direction, but she seems to be going from the frying pan and into the fire...
THE WRIGHT MAN 3: This feels like the nice, normal, Bizarro-world version of that Truth segment from back in S1, where he visits his ex and their son.
THE YMCA: It's fun to stay there...unless you're the LA Express, apparently.
BRITISH EXPRESS: See above comments about the Street Fight, except more so, since this was more of a routine match. I never intended it to go long at all, it was always going to be a semi-rote squash, but I feel it could have come out a lot better had I been mentally fit while writing it.
THE MASTER PLAN: Better not tell Niko Sinclair to his face that you're the ones setting the standard in the tag division, Jimmy, my dude. Just saying....that won't end well for you. Also, bro, why isn't The Bro saying his namesake word, bro?
THE WRIGHT MAN 4: See above. I think I know where this is eventually going now...
THE BATTLE OF POWERHOUSES: A flat-out comedy...can we even call it a match?..the sort rarely seen in GLOBAL, unless it involves Truth hamming it up with his buddies. I like the creative way found to preserve the streak, and above all, THAT THE STREAK WAS PRESERVED. I was afraid Double A was about to get written out. I MUST, however, protest at the lack of Alferson holding a finger up in the air before the bell OR checking his belly button for lint after it. It's like we have some new writers handling him this season or something. Sheesh!
RICH UNITED: The story here is Donny's ineptitude, and it was played up so much, I thought he was getting ready to turn on his family - or, alternatively, put on a star-making performance and prove everyone wrong. Turns out, nope, the kid's just useless. Although, YAY, a win for Team United! Did not see THAT coming! Though I think it was just a touch too abrupt, but I guess that proves Deltzer's point... An enjoyable storyline/angle match, nothing more or less. 3/5.
OVER AND OUT: A retirement speech for Paul Sanders. Wonder if he delivered it in a salmon suit. Anyway, if they weren't faces before, they are now. Ready, Player One?
YOU WANT A MATCH? THEN EARN IT: Predictable response from Nikolai to the PTA. I think if the Rutherfords continue to book TV time each week to come out and basically say 'we're great and no one can beat us, they might get even more over as heels.
WE'RE CRAP: Surprisingly, not a segment title for the GLOBAL Force or Trouble Roxx. Anyway, the rift in the Rich Family opens ever wider...one has to wonder where this will all end.
NOT TONIGHT: Unusually, Darring is caught in a private moment behind the scenes, as opposed to in front of the camera. It makes for an interesting change, and it also makes you wonder as to why that might be.
DREAM X: Let's freaking gooooooo!!! Great match, as expected, between two stupidly evenly matched contenders. The writer even smartly worked around incorporating my segment in there, so there would not be a disconnect. I knew how this was going to end all along, obviously, but I still enjoyed being swept along for the ride. This is a match I would have been happy to witness had I been watching an episode of actual wrestling TV, and so I will give it a rating to match. 4/5
FILM NOIR: Wherein GLOBAl turns into a 1950s detective film for a couple of minutes.
PRIME DARRING: As predicted, this was more of an angle than a match. Larkin takes the Champ to Suplex City, Darring endures like a true babyface, and gets the snot beat out of him at the end. Not much by way of action, but a story well told here, which further cements the PTA as heels. 3.25/5
JUDGMENT: ...of course he had to be on here SOMEWHERE. Oooh, threaty threaty. Just try not to lose a bunch again, Lex-Lex, m'kay?
FINAL THOUGHTS: A decent episode of TV which, for once, has better matches than segments (our boss is right in that assessment) though nothing overtly spectacular (X vs Dream comes closest in that regard). Things move nicely along, everyone looks great, and it makes one wish more eyes were on this product right now.
PEDRO'S RATING: 7/10
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MATCH OF THE NIGHT: X vs Dream, despite the schmozz finish. DAMN YOU, TRUUUUUUTTTHHH!!
SEGMENT OF THE NIGHT: I quite enjoyed the Wright Man segments, personally.
FEUD OF THE NIGHT: Dream vs Crusader, PTA vs Darring
LINE OF THE NIGHT: "Masked Maniac, the founder of Masked Bros before Hoes, the face of Masked Condoms, the epitome of Mojo, and the dream of every woman, just ran from a lady.”
RED CARPET ENTRANCE: Are these guys tourists? Why are they looking for The Globe specifically? Wait and see, I guess...
HANDSOME AND BEAUTIFUL: Amber Lee returns! Welcome back.
SIMP-LING RIVALRY: ...was that Joe Public asserting himself? :O Also, Dann takes himself way too seriously. Also also, the return of Drill Instructor Miranda, directing her anger inwards instead of outwards as she has been doing in recent times. Welcome back. I missed writing you.
STREET FIGHT: Have you ever been hyped to write a match, and at the same time, it feels like a slog? That was me with this one. I had a bad head cold and the consequent brain-fog made this one take a lot longer than it should have. I hope the end result was worth it, with one moment in particular hitting the way I meant it to.
A COMPROMISE: Angel pivots direction, but she seems to be going from the frying pan and into the fire...
THE WRIGHT MAN 3: This feels like the nice, normal, Bizarro-world version of that Truth segment from back in S1, where he visits his ex and their son.
THE YMCA: It's fun to stay there...unless you're the LA Express, apparently.
BRITISH EXPRESS: See above comments about the Street Fight, except more so, since this was more of a routine match. I never intended it to go long at all, it was always going to be a semi-rote squash, but I feel it could have come out a lot better had I been mentally fit while writing it.
THE MASTER PLAN: Better not tell Niko Sinclair to his face that you're the ones setting the standard in the tag division, Jimmy, my dude. Just saying....that won't end well for you. Also, bro, why isn't The Bro saying his namesake word, bro?
THE WRIGHT MAN 4: See above. I think I know where this is eventually going now...
THE BATTLE OF POWERHOUSES: A flat-out comedy...can we even call it a match?..the sort rarely seen in GLOBAL, unless it involves Truth hamming it up with his buddies. I like the creative way found to preserve the streak, and above all, THAT THE STREAK WAS PRESERVED. I was afraid Double A was about to get written out. I MUST, however, protest at the lack of Alferson holding a finger up in the air before the bell OR checking his belly button for lint after it. It's like we have some new writers handling him this season or something. Sheesh!
RICH UNITED: The story here is Donny's ineptitude, and it was played up so much, I thought he was getting ready to turn on his family - or, alternatively, put on a star-making performance and prove everyone wrong. Turns out, nope, the kid's just useless. Although, YAY, a win for Team United! Did not see THAT coming! Though I think it was just a touch too abrupt, but I guess that proves Deltzer's point... An enjoyable storyline/angle match, nothing more or less. 3/5.
OVER AND OUT: A retirement speech for Paul Sanders. Wonder if he delivered it in a salmon suit. Anyway, if they weren't faces before, they are now. Ready, Player One?
YOU WANT A MATCH? THEN EARN IT: Predictable response from Nikolai to the PTA. I think if the Rutherfords continue to book TV time each week to come out and basically say 'we're great and no one can beat us, they might get even more over as heels.
WE'RE CRAP: Surprisingly, not a segment title for the GLOBAL Force or Trouble Roxx. Anyway, the rift in the Rich Family opens ever wider...one has to wonder where this will all end.
NOT TONIGHT: Unusually, Darring is caught in a private moment behind the scenes, as opposed to in front of the camera. It makes for an interesting change, and it also makes you wonder as to why that might be.
DREAM X: Let's freaking gooooooo!!! Great match, as expected, between two stupidly evenly matched contenders. The writer even smartly worked around incorporating my segment in there, so there would not be a disconnect. I knew how this was going to end all along, obviously, but I still enjoyed being swept along for the ride. This is a match I would have been happy to witness had I been watching an episode of actual wrestling TV, and so I will give it a rating to match. 4/5
FILM NOIR: Wherein GLOBAl turns into a 1950s detective film for a couple of minutes.
PRIME DARRING: As predicted, this was more of an angle than a match. Larkin takes the Champ to Suplex City, Darring endures like a true babyface, and gets the snot beat out of him at the end. Not much by way of action, but a story well told here, which further cements the PTA as heels. 3.25/5
JUDGMENT: ...of course he had to be on here SOMEWHERE. Oooh, threaty threaty. Just try not to lose a bunch again, Lex-Lex, m'kay?
FINAL THOUGHTS: A decent episode of TV which, for once, has better matches than segments (our boss is right in that assessment) though nothing overtly spectacular (X vs Dream comes closest in that regard). Things move nicely along, everyone looks great, and it makes one wish more eyes were on this product right now.
PEDRO'S RATING: 7/10
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MATCH OF THE NIGHT: X vs Dream, despite the schmozz finish. DAMN YOU, TRUUUUUUTTTHHH!!
SEGMENT OF THE NIGHT: I quite enjoyed the Wright Man segments, personally.
FEUD OF THE NIGHT: Dream vs Crusader, PTA vs Darring
LINE OF THE NIGHT: "Masked Maniac, the founder of Masked Bros before Hoes, the face of Masked Condoms, the epitome of Mojo, and the dream of every woman, just ran from a lady.”
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Re: DOMINATION 21 FEEDBACK
Match of the night: Crusader X vs Daniel Dream
Segment of the night: The Wright Man - 3
Feud of the night: Miranda Wright and Global Force vs Angel and friends.
Line of the Night: "NO ONE *NEEDS* TO FUCKING START ANYTHING! THERE ARE NO DISQUALIFICATIONS! JUST RUSH THEM, YOU GODDAMN MORONS!!"
One Percent: Steve Blaine interviews Crusader X. Crusader X says Sean Darring is the one percent. Crusader X and Daniel Dream both have similar goals when it comes to Sean Darring but different approaches.
Red Carpet Entrance: A segment by Pedro that I really like. Him and I are building something good, I believe.
Handsome and Beautiful: Amber is back.
Simp-ling Rivalry: Joe Public calling Miranda "mom" made me laugh. Miranda might have line of the night.
Global Force vs Metal Militia: The Jagerbomb was a cool spot. Trouble Roxx comes to the rescue of Metal Militia. The Salamanders get buried under chairs. The Delayed Brainbuster by Steve Dann to Drew Robison through the announce table was also pretty cool. It seems being with Miranda Wright has upped Steve Dann's cool factor. Joe Public won a match!
A Compromise: I love Saul Morgan and Angel's interaction. Angel going against Alex Reyn would sound insane but I think she could do it. 'Could' be the operative word.
The Wright Man - 3: I'm really interested in Hank now. This is a nearly perfect segment to establish him.
The Young Man's Charity Association: The Best of British offer 'charity' to LA Express
The Best of British vs The LA Express: The Best of British has a clear advantage in the early goings. The 'throwy stuff' dialog is just great, I like Kerry a lot. Hot tag to Gage. A good match with some cheating by Rupert putting his feet on the ropes.
The Master Plan: The Prime Time Athletes get ready for Sean Darring.
The Wright Man - 4: Awww. Hank and Charlie, this interaction was cute.
The Battle of Powerhouses: Alf Alferson wins by doing nothing.
The Rich Family vs Team United: Reece's "spinal" comment got a stifled laugh from me. Team United beat down on Todd's back. Hot tag to Donny. And almost immediately after Donny gets tagged in, The Rich Family loses. Donny is the biggest disappointment to Dallas, Texas since Max Strus' buzzer-beater.
Over and Out: It's sad to see Paul Sanders leave but he had a nice good-bye promo.
You Want A Match? Then Earn It: A promo by Jeff and I.
We're Crap: Trouble among The Rich Family.
Not Tonight: A nice segment by Sean Darring.
Crusader X vs Daniel Dream: An even match in the early goings with Dream taking the first pinfall attempt. Sinclair rescues Daniel from a Suicide Dive! And Truth Control gets involved. BOO!
Film Noir: A segment done by Pedro and I. I feel like a contributed more instead of being carried in the writing. Lol. Hopefully you all like this new character.
"The Legend" Sean Darring vs a Prime Time Athlete: Sean Darring defeats Trae Larkin.
Judgment: Alex Reyn!!
Segment of the night: The Wright Man - 3
Feud of the night: Miranda Wright and Global Force vs Angel and friends.
Line of the Night: "NO ONE *NEEDS* TO FUCKING START ANYTHING! THERE ARE NO DISQUALIFICATIONS! JUST RUSH THEM, YOU GODDAMN MORONS!!"
One Percent: Steve Blaine interviews Crusader X. Crusader X says Sean Darring is the one percent. Crusader X and Daniel Dream both have similar goals when it comes to Sean Darring but different approaches.
Red Carpet Entrance: A segment by Pedro that I really like. Him and I are building something good, I believe.
Handsome and Beautiful: Amber is back.
Simp-ling Rivalry: Joe Public calling Miranda "mom" made me laugh. Miranda might have line of the night.
Global Force vs Metal Militia: The Jagerbomb was a cool spot. Trouble Roxx comes to the rescue of Metal Militia. The Salamanders get buried under chairs. The Delayed Brainbuster by Steve Dann to Drew Robison through the announce table was also pretty cool. It seems being with Miranda Wright has upped Steve Dann's cool factor. Joe Public won a match!
A Compromise: I love Saul Morgan and Angel's interaction. Angel going against Alex Reyn would sound insane but I think she could do it. 'Could' be the operative word.
The Wright Man - 3: I'm really interested in Hank now. This is a nearly perfect segment to establish him.
The Young Man's Charity Association: The Best of British offer 'charity' to LA Express
The Best of British vs The LA Express: The Best of British has a clear advantage in the early goings. The 'throwy stuff' dialog is just great, I like Kerry a lot. Hot tag to Gage. A good match with some cheating by Rupert putting his feet on the ropes.
The Master Plan: The Prime Time Athletes get ready for Sean Darring.
The Wright Man - 4: Awww. Hank and Charlie, this interaction was cute.
The Battle of Powerhouses: Alf Alferson wins by doing nothing.
The Rich Family vs Team United: Reece's "spinal" comment got a stifled laugh from me. Team United beat down on Todd's back. Hot tag to Donny. And almost immediately after Donny gets tagged in, The Rich Family loses. Donny is the biggest disappointment to Dallas, Texas since Max Strus' buzzer-beater.
Over and Out: It's sad to see Paul Sanders leave but he had a nice good-bye promo.
You Want A Match? Then Earn It: A promo by Jeff and I.
We're Crap: Trouble among The Rich Family.
Not Tonight: A nice segment by Sean Darring.
Crusader X vs Daniel Dream: An even match in the early goings with Dream taking the first pinfall attempt. Sinclair rescues Daniel from a Suicide Dive! And Truth Control gets involved. BOO!
Film Noir: A segment done by Pedro and I. I feel like a contributed more instead of being carried in the writing. Lol. Hopefully you all like this new character.
"The Legend" Sean Darring vs a Prime Time Athlete: Sean Darring defeats Trae Larkin.
Judgment: Alex Reyn!!
Re: DOMINATION 21 FEEDBACK
Thanks very much to Pedro and Hector for feedback every single week.
Putting everyone to shame, particularly me. I'll get to that.
I want to say a special thanks to the pair of you once again.
Putting everyone to shame, particularly me. I'll get to that.
I want to say a special thanks to the pair of you once again.